Diving Head FirstI wanna go so bad but right now is not my time and I"m not prepared to say goodbye all over againDiving Head First
These days are getting tough and nights are getting long my flaws make me so weak but I'm stil being strong
Maybe these words mean nothing at least I'm trying, trying to be something
Before jumping into water I need to recall how to swim right now I'm learning
how to save you and me.
Empty VasesThese expectations are so high and these buildings are so tall my friends are going places and I feel so small.Empty Vases
At my own place, these flowers will bloom I waste my time waiting for you in my room.
And this is just the start. with no end in sight waking up the next day lets me know I won yesterdays' fight
The Bombs To Break A PromiseAnd to think,The Bombs To Break A Promise
I used to save every momento now is just a haunting memory
Letters written in pen photographs taken twice Because one of us blinked the first time
And to think, I used to build my life around you when you never tried. Why couldn't you say, I was getting out of hand I guess your lips were busy
doing other things,( with other people.)
Ask me how I'm doing today,
living well never felt so good.
Double ForteIt's hard to believe with this cloud over my head flooding these streets keep me away from subway trains.Double Forte
These greedy piano-playing hands grab everything in sight. The words you're about to say and the dreams that keep you awake at night.
As bad as I want to go home right now is not the time. If distance was a disease I'd lay in bed on the brightest days.
Locked up and sealed away It's hard to believe, but easy to understand Black and white keys struck by these piano-playing hands.
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the light shines across the moon: you could say:
Lights llumination touches where the moon hides.
I know that may be thats the way i write but try and experiment using expeimental vocab, its up to you at the end of the day dude.
As for the message part i meant that sometimes your writing is to random, anyway i like your writing style and some people would say who am i to tell you how to write, im just trying to give you some pointers neway hope they are of help if not no worrys
take it easy
Take care x
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Who taught the killing game first?
I just thought your wording was random and if you were trying to make a point then i wouldnt have critisised blah blah blah meh laters dudey
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Who taught the killing game first?
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Two roads diverged in a wood, and I-
I took the one less traveled by,
And that has made all the difference.
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